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Wednesday, February 2, 2011

You Asked of Me

Today, in the still quiet moments,
Shared in hopes of easing the pain,
You asked of me... I knew not if...
Could I give you this, this glimmer,
Of hope, of a pain free moment.

Today, in the still quiet moments,
Shared in pain of not want for loss,
You asked of me... I knew not if,
Could I give you this, this glimmer,
No pain, of a hope filled moment.

Today, in the still quiet moments,
Shared in darkness, challenged my soul,
You asked of me... I knew not if...
Could I give you this, this glimmer,
Of peace, of a better moment.

Today in the still quiet moments,
Shared in love, friends till the end,
You asked of me... I knew not if...
Could I give you this, this glimmer,
Of life, of an eternity.

Today in the still quiet moments,
Shared together the struggles,
You asked of me... I knew not if...
Could I give you this, this glimmer,
Of victories, success in you.

Today in the still quiet moments,
Shared for all whom you touched,
You asked of me... I knew not if...
Could I give you this, this glimmer,
A reflection, gracing this world.

Today in the still quiet moments,
Shared by all who felt your love,
You asked of me... I knew not if...
Could I give you this, this glimmer,
A legacy, your moment in time.

Petrina Lesko
February 2011

One Stop Poetry offers a great venue, One Shot Wednesday where we can share with other writers, other poets the art that is our work.

16 comments:

dustus said...

Really like when your poem introduces love into the mix about half way through; it changes the tone of what precedes it and made for a nice ending.

Jane Doe said...

This is absolutely lovely. Such an emotinal piece. I thoroughly enjoyed every line.

georgeiana said...

beautiful. gave goose bumps.

ds said...

Ah, I really like this one; the repetition and the slight twists throughout are both soothing and thought-stirring. The emotion was very real.
Thank you.

Diana Lee said...

I love repetition in poetry and this is simply lovely. Happy to have found you through One Shot.

Brian Miller said...

you tug hard on the emotion with this piece...great use of repitition as well...smiles.

girldaydreaming said...

the idea of one being incredibly thoughtful of another is beautifully moving.... the poem itself seems to etch 'a moment in time.'

signed...bkm said...

Oh Petrina there seems to be a deep connection in this piece as if one is slowly leaving...the repetition is great ...pulls the readers right through til the end...bkm

lynnaima said...

An enjoyable read, thank you. Nice write and thanks for the visit :)

Olivia said...

Wonderful..!!
A perfect song with beautiful emotions poured in it.. :)

Love xx

Claudia said...

a glimmer of piece, hope, victory, legacy ...really liked this self-questioning, reflecting poem

PattiKen said...

This is so poignant and sad. I pictured sitting with a dying friend, feeling the frustration of being unable to help.

Thanks for stopping by my blog to leave a comment. I really appreciate it.

Alix Moore said...

This poem is electric--rhythm, repetition, emotion, craft--powerful.
Thank you for sharing this legacy.
Alix

cianphelan said...

An emotionally moving piece, and sad, quite sad...

But still, a sweet ending, and a carefully crafted progression leading to it - the noted tonal shift in the second half warmed me considerably. Such love. It left an endearing tone of sweetness to the whole work - and the repetitive quality to bits of the piece certainly drove home the emotional quality of it. Nicely done.

anthonynorth said...

So full of emotion. Beautiful.

Steve Isaak said...

Thoughtful, emotional, effective.