We walked, eyes wide open into the vast space,
You stand aware of each breath of wind,
Each voice hidden in tiny spaces, searching the day,
Trespassing through the rose bushes, catching scents,
You stand aware of each breath of wind.
Ears perked, listening to the whispers of the frog,
Head cocks to watch the flame-like leaf swirl,
Fluttering downward, catching a breath, twirling,
It lands in the lifeless bed, flames laying down to ash,
You stand aware of each breath of wind.
Wings flutter past, catching your wide open eyes,
You spring forth, the excitement welling up, eager,
The bird dances in the air above, only to land beyond,
Beyond the length of your leash, just beyond hope,
You stand aware of each breath of wind.
Moments of Guidance, reminders of all that is close,
Excitement burns within your soul, eager to see,
With eyes wide open, to see the Freedom of nature,
Desire burning within to chase after rabbit scents,
You stand aware of each breath of wind.
Petrina Lesko
December 2010
I am linking this post, to One Single Impression for the inspirational thoughts on the Freedom of nature, to Sunday Scribblings for prompt #244: Guidance and to Jingle Poetry for this weeks Poetry Potluck Monday the topic being: Dreams, Visions and Reverie. Connect to these links to see other takes on the prompts.
33 comments:
this was really good. I can picture the ears cocking this way and that. The nose in the wind, sniffing!
Really Great. I can visualize Lucky cocking the ears, sniffing the ears and searching her surroundings. Very creative.
Wonderful poem of the dog's awareness, beautifully composed. Really enjoyed reading it!
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your writing is very engrossing. i am hooked from the very first line and do not want it to end! i love that! very rarely that happens for me.
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I love each breath of which you speak. What a cute little fellow! Thanks
The repetition at the end of each verse was fantastic - and somehow like the rhythmic shaking of a dog's little legs as it runs in its dream ..'lucky dog dream' indeed! Jae
This was beautiful...dogs are such wonderful creatures!
you seem to know the dogs exact thoughts and I am sure your are right. It is a beautiful animal and I assume the chain is necessary but I shed a tear as I read his thoughts with you.
I loved this!
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Being aware of each breath of wind.. indeed moving towards enlightenment.. God bless!!! I felt pretty good reading it..
Lovely!!.... the alertness of the dog and dog mannerisms well depicted in your composition!!
Adorable pooch, and a delightful poem for him! Beautiful composition - I can very vividly picture the dog doing all these things...though I will admit I'm seeing my own dog when I do. Wonderful piece for the potluck!
Petrina,
I really enjoyed this and I love the pics of Lucky and Sandie.
Pamela
Beyond the length of your leash, just beyond hope,
You stand aware of each breath of wind.
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divine words...
thanks for linking up.
A+
Amazing and fabulous :)
i do enjoy how what seems light and ethereal is so beautifully captured, whispers and wind, breath and voices and fluttering wings... incredbibly lovely and such a sweet way to spend time on sunday... sharing lucky dog dreams and writing.
Really sweet pup and poetry! That's a really great take on the theme.
Ah, a poem to please all dog lovers and dogs.
What a wonderful take on the prompt. I love that you look at it from a dog's perspective.
What a unique perspective...I can experience all the wonders of nature through this little dog. I love the recurring line you weave seamlessly in each stanza. Beautifully written.
Really lovely piece.So warm.Writing it through the dog's perspective gives it a very warm feeling.
This was a joy to read!Thanks for sharing!
I like this a lot...very creative.
I love the images here...flame-like leaves swirling, birds fluttering just out of reach...patient little dog. Just lovely.
Beautifully crafted imagery and use of language -- loved the read very much. I especially love the line "You stand aware of each breath of wind." and the repetition of it at the end of each stanza.
very interesting! well written and got me so emotional..i love dogs,i feel they have a language of their own..their eyes speak their hearts..great poem!
i enjoyed the marvelous imagery..:)
Ahhh...this is lovely. And what a gorgeous dog you have. I'm not suppose to say that btw, I'm a cat person!!! ;<)
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I'm not a dog lover, had a scary moment or a two years ago, but I liked the choice of your words here! Nice poem!
Really enjoyed this. My dogs always remind me to be fully present in the moment and to take joy in that moment...and this poem reminds me of that lesson.
Man's best friend, so well put a poem...Oneshot
absolutely loving words- the dog has such a wonderful heart
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Loved this poem. Riveting.
One can only dream of such level of awareness.. beautiful..
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