Shadows cast down by the days sunlit skies,
Evening prints within the sands time,
Casted, permeating surfaces,
Raised depths, crevices drawn upward.
Colorless, robust shadows reflecting,
Dampened earth pulling in, tiding out,
Waters adrift, lessened earthly surfaces,
Moonlit nights, beaming down to her feet.
Was this evening shadows or daytime paths,
Surfaces drip, illusionary wishes.
Petrina Lesko
January 2011
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| iPhoneography by Iquanyin |
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25 comments:
"crevices drawn upward" Cool turn of phrase on that. Good use of misdirection—thought it was going to be a rhyming poem after first 2 lines, and then you flipped the script on me. Nice challenge response.
Good one.. it just moved on.. let us all always have happier evenings..
i love every line!
dani
There's a moonlit quality to this.
there is some fun word play and rhyme in this one...you created good movement too with your flow...
oh i liked the moonlit nights, beaming down to her feet...
Oh you really captured an atmosphere with this and I really liked the last line too. :-)
I was just about to say how atmospheric this poem was, and then I saw that Susannah said nearly the same thing. Just lovely.
Nice. The question at the end prompted me to re-read the piece. the words got me overlaying them on the image and they fit very well.
Very cool. Here’s mine. http://thelunaticsdiary.blogspot.com/2011/01/searing-eternity.html If you have a twitter, follow me (my username is MsMatsui)!
Petrine this encapsulated and indeed compliments the photo perfectly.
Beautiful and colorful use of words! Love the photo also.
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i liked the questions...this picture seemed to raise a lot of questions for me too...beautiful. thank you.
Very nice, Iquanyin. :)
Between the poem and the photo, one just has to wonder who it was in the not too far past that came walking by. Leaving her prints in the sand.
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A nice accompaniment to the photo prompt.
How lovely this is!
Like it!
I had a few illusionary wishes of my own on a beach not too long ago...this makes me a little sad.
Beautiful poem.
wow I am so impressed at your skill. well done.
your poetry inspires a feeling within, pondering all that happens between sunlit skies and shadows and moonlight... those soft quiet, in-between places, as nature does her work... very nice.
Lovely poem. It's pretty hard to weave in three themes, but you were able to focus on each one and still write an over-all impressive poem. :)
Just beautiful! I really enjoyed this one!
Beautifully written, my friend. Thank you.
Lovely poem very nicely weaved.
This is soooo true! When it comes to golden skies and looming shadows, it becomes tough to say if its the start of a new day, or the end of one..
It's all about perspective.. and I think you have conveyed this idea really beautifully in your poem here...
"Surfaces drip, illusionary wishes." -- loved this line!! Dreamy, and yet so realistic...
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