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Saturday, January 22, 2011

Clarity

image by Mike Roemer as shared at One Shoot Sunday
Clarity

Circles form in the small cloud filled room,
Smokey images, time... moments left unsaid,
The juice, a vine forbidden wash upon gloom,
Cellars filled, brimming beneath the sun in red.

Moments encased, oak trimmed and entombed,
Luscious grapes, pressed, plunged, or was it tread?
The fluidity of smoke, then  to assume,
Glasses waved, tasted, for clarity of head.

Circles form in the small cloud filled room,
Cellars filled, brimming beneath the sun in red.
Moments encased, oak trimmed and entombed,
Glasses waved, tasted, for clarity of head.


Petrina Lesko
January 2011

This post, this poem was inspired by both the photo for this week by Mike Roemer over at One Shoot Sunday and this weeks prompt of Clarity over at Writer's Island


28 comments:

haikulovesongs said...

VERY nice!

dustus said...

Nice detail you focused on, especially the circles in the blur and lens flare. Conceptually, love how the poem also comes full circle to reach a resolution of clarity. Great challenge response!

vivinfrance said...

The poem is like an Impressionist painting. You see and write with clarity.

anthonynorth said...

Great imagery in this.

repressedsoul said...

Adored your smooth lines and the transition in the last stanza. Great take on the photo prompt!

Eliza said...

Oh I love that Petrina..... I've never thought about it like that as I'm sipping my glass of wine. Beautiful.

me_duress said...

Glasses waved, tasted, for clarity of head. - love this line especially!

izzy said...

Love the 'moments left unsaid'
I used to rely a great deal on
physical expressions and subtleties-
and smoke rings implied- Thanks!

Jerry said...

I love the form that frames the words. I didn't see clarity in this picture...but I do now. I like the deconstruction all the way back to how the grapes were processed.

Nessa said...

Lovely and very moody.

Ted said...

Oh yes the licidity of all things in that first drink.

Ted said...

lucidity(sp) sorry I need a drink :)

OldSchoolHaiku said...

Wonderful circle of clarity!

hedgewitch said...

Definitely circles here I missed till you pointed them out so clearly. The cellar imagery is really effective, of experience trapped, refined, and released, then measured. Excellent take on both prompts.

Kim Nelson said...

You pulled me right into that warm, humming wine bar!

Friko said...

You caught the atmosphere perfectly.

Elizabeth said...

Really well constructed poem. Vivid imagery and love the circling back in the last stanza. Wonderful response to the prompt,

Elizabeth

flaubert said...

Petrina, I love the images created in this piece.
The flow is perfect.
Pamela

Gigi Ann said...

Very creative and descriptive take on the prompt.

ds said...

Love this!The form suits your imagery, and the photo, so well. Thank you for sharing this.

nance marie said...

i am especially taken with
"moments encased"

tells of things past, like work and love...that went in, which is waiting to be shared in the future.

nance marie said...

btw...can't find your name on your blog anywhere. now, i'm curious.

girldaydreaming said...

this poem is quite luscious really! love it.

Glynn said...

Photos like this capture a moment, and often the moment can become eternal. Your poem captures the photo. Good one.

Mona said...

Thank you for your nice words. I love your poem. The photo too.

thelaughinghousewife said...

Love the wave after wave of images.

Dave King said...

Impressive. A stimulating read.

Zouxzoux said...

This has a very nice flow. I enjoyed it!