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| image by Mike Roemer as shared at One Shoot Sunday |
Clarity
Circles form in the small cloud filled room,
Smokey images, time... moments left unsaid,
The juice, a vine forbidden wash upon gloom,
Cellars filled, brimming beneath the sun in red.
Moments encased, oak trimmed and entombed,
Luscious grapes, pressed, plunged, or was it tread?
The fluidity of smoke, then to assume,
Glasses waved, tasted, for clarity of head.
Circles form in the small cloud filled room,
Cellars filled, brimming beneath the sun in red.
Moments encased, oak trimmed and entombed,
Glasses waved, tasted, for clarity of head.
Petrina Lesko
January 2011
This post, this poem was inspired by both the photo for this week by Mike Roemer over at One Shoot Sunday and this weeks prompt of Clarity over at Writer's Island.
28 comments:
VERY nice!
Nice detail you focused on, especially the circles in the blur and lens flare. Conceptually, love how the poem also comes full circle to reach a resolution of clarity. Great challenge response!
The poem is like an Impressionist painting. You see and write with clarity.
Great imagery in this.
Adored your smooth lines and the transition in the last stanza. Great take on the photo prompt!
Oh I love that Petrina..... I've never thought about it like that as I'm sipping my glass of wine. Beautiful.
Glasses waved, tasted, for clarity of head. - love this line especially!
Love the 'moments left unsaid'
I used to rely a great deal on
physical expressions and subtleties-
and smoke rings implied- Thanks!
I love the form that frames the words. I didn't see clarity in this picture...but I do now. I like the deconstruction all the way back to how the grapes were processed.
Lovely and very moody.
Oh yes the licidity of all things in that first drink.
lucidity(sp) sorry I need a drink :)
Wonderful circle of clarity!
Definitely circles here I missed till you pointed them out so clearly. The cellar imagery is really effective, of experience trapped, refined, and released, then measured. Excellent take on both prompts.
You pulled me right into that warm, humming wine bar!
You caught the atmosphere perfectly.
Really well constructed poem. Vivid imagery and love the circling back in the last stanza. Wonderful response to the prompt,
Elizabeth
Petrina, I love the images created in this piece.
The flow is perfect.
Pamela
Very creative and descriptive take on the prompt.
Love this!The form suits your imagery, and the photo, so well. Thank you for sharing this.
i am especially taken with
"moments encased"
tells of things past, like work and love...that went in, which is waiting to be shared in the future.
btw...can't find your name on your blog anywhere. now, i'm curious.
this poem is quite luscious really! love it.
Photos like this capture a moment, and often the moment can become eternal. Your poem captures the photo. Good one.
Thank you for your nice words. I love your poem. The photo too.
Love the wave after wave of images.
Impressive. A stimulating read.
This has a very nice flow. I enjoyed it!
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