I wanted to get a little more input on this one so I will be linking it over at dVerse ~Poets Pub for their OpenLinkNight. Enjoy everyone.
Riding high there in the skies,
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| Magpie Tales #75 |
tightly roping within this world,
she juggles stars naturally,
as if this was her solemn place.
Eyes bewildered as Sirius flies,
her magic shines hot, up and twirled,
dancing aloft the world we see,
as before, this a new world's face.
In her efforts may come surprise,
for if she slips, from ropes be furled,
juggled there for those who will be,
upon the wires of fun we trace.
Eyes bewildered as Sirius flies,
riding there within the skies,
juggled there for those who will be,
dancing aloft the world we see.
She juggles stars naturally,
as if this was her solemn plea.
Petrina Lesko
July 2011
Here I offer a second take (inspired by thoughts of a friend's son who is in Australia, in school to hopefully become a part of Cirque du Soleil) on the wonderful prompt by Tess Kincaid, at her fabulous meme, Magpie Tales. Come join the fun and see what flies for you.
25 comments:
Lovely image, juggling stars. Good one!
This is lovely. You really captured the art of the circus, and of poetry. Nice.
Myrna
(Daily Spirit)
You've done it.
Cirque du Soleil was my first thought when I saw the prompt photo, but I couldn't think of what to say about it.
This is perfect.
—Kay, Alberta, Canada
..i actually never thought of that thing when i saw this pic.. ‘she juggles the stars”.. very creative thinking.. thanks for the read!(:
Brightest blessings!
~Kelvin
She can conquer anything..you created a hero after my own heart! I too saw the Cirque du Soleil in my mind's eye...good luck for that..
I really like "juggles the stars" Patrina. Enjoyed the poem.
Very creative poem and perfect for the prompt! It captures the spirit of Cirque du Soleil just right! What form of poem is this? It seems somewhat sonnet-like but but it has 18 lines and doesn't fit the sonnet rhyme schemes I'm familiar with. Whatever it is, I like it!
@ Lolamouse... This one seemed to flow freely on its own, creating its own form. Near the end, I liked the idea of repeating some lines (with some alteration)... but then I like it too so will probably use it again.
You captured it very well. Like these lines:
Eyes bewildered as Sirius flies,
her magic shines hot, up and twirled,
dancing aloft the world we see,
as before, this a new world's face.
cirq de soleil would be so cool...they do an amazing show...the third stanza loses me a bit but you bring it back after...
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I still have yet to see cirq de soleil live...
The lines and interweaving of repeating words gives this piece a juggling feel - I felt whirled around as Sirius does with the starts :)
I like how you evoked juggling with your words and repetition. I could see you writing a pantoum on this theme.
Yay! I absolutely love the title you've chosen, and am compelled to ask if you started from there? I thought the word weaving was wonderful!
upbeat.
Great pace, on second reading I caught the correct tempo, on third reading I enjoyed the imagery. The more we put into a piece, the more we receive.. eh?
have a good day from Oz :)
This is lovely - it has a natural flow and great imagery
This is a fabulous piece. You kept to your own free flow and it works well. You'd be good at song lyrics (if you don't already write them!).
Beautiful poem and showed off both the visual and performing art in lively descriptions.
I love that concept of juggling stars. Great poem.
I really like this second piece. The idea of her juggling stars is wonderful! You've done a great job on both works. Bravo!
The repetitions make this poem. Well done.
splendid :)
Captivating... I love the third stanza!
i love both this poem and your nonet, Petrina. the idea of juggling stars is totally captivating! definitely worthy of Cirque du Soleil.
dani ♥
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