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Monday, March 28, 2011

For Lessons Taught

Illustration by Freddie Langeler 1920's
as offered at Monday's Child: fair of face

The gnomes and fairies fine did come,
For lessons taught by Mr. Hare,
With friends his words, oh we will share.
To learn the lessons we did hum.

Yes coats and tails and hats were some,
To this party we all did wear.
The gnomes and fairies fine did come,
For lessons taught by Mr. Hare.

With wings held back, before and from,
The mouse and bird, tried hard to care,
And cake with all, Sir Hare did share,
To rhythmic words our feet did drum.
The gnomes and fairies fine did come,
For lessons taught by Mr. Hare.

Petrina Lesko
March 2011

The above poem is my first attempt at a Rondel.  Due to adding the last line, it is actually a Rondel Prime.  It's pattern is ABba abAB abbaA (for Rondel) adding B (for Rondel Prime).  It is written in iambic tetrameter - 8 syllables with the stress on the second foot.

The inspiration came from both Monday's Child: fair of face and this weeks illustration by Freddie Langeler and today's lesson, Part II of Rondels over at One Stop Poetry co hosted by Samuel Peralta and Claudia Schonfeld.  I will be linking up with both sites.

12 comments:

JL Dodge said...

You made this look very easy !
Love how you got all the critters in there and the cake too!
Great form, fun tale !
JL&B

Sherry Irvine said...

I'm learning so much - thanks for the poetry style...I'm relatively new at writing...and now there's another style for me to try! Loved the "lesson learned" I'm the girl with the short blond hair with the red shirt - on the far right :-) Loved it...xo

libraryscene said...

rather enjoyed how you combined the two prompts. I'm new to writing rondel form as well, but it seems that you've a wonderful grasp on it! fun ~

art2cee2 said...

I don't know much about poetry, but I know what I like and I like this one! :-)

Lisa said...

I like this very much. Great job on this new form.

Myrna R. said...

This is great. You do make it seem easy, which means you've got the knack for it.

signed...bkm said...

Another wonderful Rondell and write on a party in the woods with all present for the partaking...a lovely lesson given...thank you for posting..blessings...bkm

Claudia said...

oh this is so lovely - like out of a fairy tale - and it flows effortlessly - i like it very, very much and you sure nailed the form

The Fool said...

Nice one. I think you have got it right. Guess Claudia and Sam will be giving you feedback soon. You have nicely described almost everything seen on the picture.

lightverse said...

Wow! You're sure this is your first attempt at the Rondel? I wouldn't have guessed that! You did a great job of using the form to tell the story - and a wonderful story it is!

Lyn said...

What a magical quality..I am there!!

Jingle said...

With wings held back, before and from,
The mouse and bird, tried hard to care,
And cake with all, Sir Hare did share,
To rhythmic words our feet did drum..


your words strike music here, love the imagery.
;)