She wandered the forest trail, searching to find,
Wood branches, boulders, exactly the kind.
The one piece to fit what she had in mind,
The structure was strong, with mortice did bind.
Years of placing each stone within its wall,
Planning with care, never these stones to fall.
With mortice and wood, each piece be to all,
Boards carried the weight, the burden was tall.
To shores she did travel, ends of the earth,
In search of those bigger, a stronger worth,
Carry the load, held... to measure the girth,
Placed the last boulder, filling her with mirth.
Her fortress was strong, now safe she would be,
Hidden from the world, where no one could see.
Safe beyond her walls, a solace for she,
No harm penetrates, held away from thee.
Close to her fortress, always did she stay,
Alone in her world, the pain could not play.
Yet loneliness engulfed her all of the day,
And down on her knees fell her soul to pray.
Then as she began to wander from here,
Searching the world, something to hold dear.
Her being still frail, her heart filled with fear,
Into the fortress, you dared to come near.
You took her hand, led her away from there,
A whole new world, beautiful, you did share.
These walls her fortress be, down you would tear,
For in her heart, you shared love and then care.
To shores she does travel, ends of the earth,
In search of those better, a stronger worth,
Carry the load, held... allow her rebirth,
Replaced solitude, filling up her dearth.
With her you share because you are her friend,
The fortress is gone, love her way did send.
She wanders the forest trails, around the bend,
This tale does she tell, and now it is penned.
I am linking this poem to Jingle Poetry - Poetry Potluck Monday. This weeks topic was Buildings, Landmarks and Monuments.
PS... I am going to also link this poem with One Shot Wednesday. Hope everyone enjoys.
27 comments:
Intense Imagery- I kind of identify this one at different places.. wonderful weaving of words Dear..
Loads of Love xox
http://oliviasmindlymatters.wordpress.com/2010/09/28/burning-soul/
The fortress metaphor works nicely...enjoyed the rhythm of your rhymes. (^_^)
There's such a calming quality to the tale.
that's dynamic and super powerful flow...
one has to build strong fortress to protect oneself at times, pain may not go away.
brilliant entry...
Glad to see you beam with jingle poetry.
Here is one of my entries, an award is attached, thanks for the support.
http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/11/08/my-sister-lives-too-far-away/
Fortified nice piece.
Fortress around soul is must with enough entries.
lovely..
I have never had the patience or knack to pull off rhyme... It's so awesome to read when someone can do it and do it with flare.
You used the topic (which could be described as quite difficult to write about) in such a rich way.
A lovely little tale and the rhymes work it well! An enjoyable read and maybe a longer tale for the telling?
http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2010/11/08/my-fortress/
Words are crafted beautifully in your poem..enjoyed it!
Beautiful imagination...and beautiful words to describe your poem... :)
this is a wonderful journey you took us on today...with incredible imagery...nice verse...
I enjoyed reading this. A tender story penned. I think it's a great response to the prompt, which I do think is a difficult one.
A lovely poem, filled with loneliness, then love. Thank you.
Great piece of poetry, well structured and a pleasure to read
Kx
you are a true poet,
Thanks for brightening Jingle Poetry Potluck with your talent.
Happy Wednesday.
xxx
Lovely Visualization. A beautiful piece well written. I loved it.
Great narrative poetry. It is often difficult to tell a tale in your lines. You pulled it off! :)
It so seemed that the lines were speaking to me, showing me what I am...
This is wondeful. I felt each branch and rock
I felt every line of this poem. Great work!
A captivating write, one I can very much relate to. Vivid imagery. A wonderful piece.
Anita.
Lovely write... you put me right there
Cheers
Luke @ WordSalad
Interesting One Shot, like a true ghost story.
I don't know how I missed this one on poetry potluck and lucky that I could see this via One shot... its a great one. I enjoyed your words very much.. thanks for sharing...
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wonderful poem. very maturely written. good use of structure and rhyme. nice job!
Beautiful work, you took the monument theme to a great level, many of us build a fortress around us but sometimes we miss the chance to know someone special because we don't open the doors!
Wow... good to see you here and this one.. :)
Love MyD.. xox
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